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Felix Carter's Ex-Military Experience

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Steam Name: (Currently) Doom Slayer

Steam ID: STEAM_0:1:36507262

Steam Profile Link: https://steamcommunity.com/id/nutmegian/

Rp Experience: I've RPed since early 2013 to now. However, there was a break from 2015 to early this year due to lack of a computer issue.

How did you stumble upon our server?: I seen a few of my friends (InOx and Knomad) on here and I seen the dev server and remembered a Zero Hour RP from the past, so I wanted to take interest.

 

Character Name: Felix Carter

Character Sex: Male

Character Age: 28

Occupation (Current or Before): Before the Outbreak, he was a United States Army personnel, his MOS being 25Q. During the outbreak, he held on to his duty until him and his group was left with no contact from Higher Command for weeks and his group entirely seperated to their own personal lives. Later, he joined a Militia and he stayed with it for the first two years after outbreak. However, later the miltia deformed after it had died out after the militia's town was swarmed by the infected due to sabotage in the perimeter defenses.

Character Equipment: (Including Clothes to Weapon in this order)

*Brown Winter Jacket

*Pair Of Multicamo Army Pants

*Pair Of Army-Issued Boots

*M.O.L.L.E. Plate Carrier (Level III)

*Heckler & Koch Modified MP5 [.40 S&W] (One Magazine)

*Combat Knife

Moral Alignment(See Chart below this post): Lawful Neutral

Strengths: Well-taught with Firearms, Well-taught for close quarter self defense (basic boxing), Good with long-distance radio devices and maintenance. 

Weaknesses: Reckless in Combative Situations, Former injuries of broken ribs (During the outbreak [Makes it hard to have high stamnia])

Character Backstory a.ka. how or why are you here (One paragraph minimum, be creative! More backstory does not always mean a better app! Put thought into how they'll interact with others too!):     

    **Felix was born on August 12, 1992 in Arthur, Nebraska. He was raised only by his father throughout his childhood, though the most he remembers was how his father being a drinker and that they'd be on the constant moving around the state of Nebraska. He grew this mind setting that trying to make friends in each new place he'd be at for just a few months was pointless to attempt, since he wouldn't get to see them again and began to form this mind set to not be very social-able with others. Felix, throughout his schooling presentations, was doing well since all he had to do at home was school work. He studied hard and kept to the books, doing pretty well throughout his age. When he was 14, it was the start of high school in Dakota City and that his father told him that they were gonna stay there till Felix had finished high school. He stuck with the basic classes at the start, however as he proceeded through high school, he was told he had to start doing advanced classes since his GPA was to high for basic classes. He took Geometry CP, Algebra CP, and so forth. He later graduates as the class of 2010 with a 3.7 GPA.

    ** In the same year he graduated, he joins the US Army 6 months later. He pursues the role of a 'multi-channel transmission systems operator-maintainer', which basically means he does maintenance work on radio-devices, antennas, anything related to making radios operational. He decided this profession since he was planning for a well paying job when he was out of service, since many opportunities required antenna maintenance. He decided that this could be a new start, a new way of a changing thought process since he knew he had to talk with other people since this was very different than high school and he wouldn't be able to shrug people away. Felix had served in to the Army for a year state-side as he was posted in Minneapolis, Minnesota . Later, he was deployed overseas in eastern Afghanistan and experienced combat for the first time in his life. He was scared during his first engagement, hunkered down against a dumpster while his convoy going through a town had gotten ambushed. He felt small, unable to muster to peek out and fire back. His team leader had managed to move up to him and snapped his fingers to grab Felix's attention. He looked up as he heard his officer say to him while bullets whizzed by,"Inhale, count to 4, exhale, count to 4. You'll be fine kid! Come on, we need you!". His hands was filled from the officer putting his service rifle in them, which he began to inhale and count to himself. His team leader moves back and used his handheld radio to talk to the other troops. That day kept to his head for the rest of his service, as he did fully 4 years in Afghanistan yet he never regretted the deployment since he felt a sense of brotherhood, his attitude being that he's more accepting to those who experience fighting like he did. He was pulled back to Minneapolis, Minnesota. Oddly, he missed the city life at the base in Minneapolis.

    ** He was ranked as a Lance Corporal after another year being stationed in Minneapolis at Saint Paul Joint Air Reserve Station, which was 7.1 miles south-southeast of Minneapolis. Though, on the day the outbreak started, he was at his desk while he was watching the news on the ceiling attached TV in the office room. He looked up to find a news chopper was flying over what looked like a riot, which he was thinking to himself,"People these days...being ignorant as he-". Then he stopped, watching the news closely as the camera zoomed in and he found people were biting others. He felt confused, before his radio erupted that all hands had to get armed and ready. The first day of outbreak, his base was setting up tents and all to prepare to shelter citizens until evacuation was going to start, which was scheduled later in the week. A few dozen troops were stationed on guard duty for the air force base, as citizens transported on buses were brought in but first quarantined by the National Guard. Those who came in to contact of the infection, he saw being put on buses while 4 soldiers went with each bus, never to see them again. He felt that continuing to stay caged in was just asking to have a internal outbreak in the base and spread concern towards his higher ups when he was told to shut up and keep doing what he was ordered to do. Months passed in the first year since the outbreak, doubt resting in his mind as he was highly concerned of what was going to happen. On the start of the 6th month, soldiers were huddled in to a hangar as their commanding officers stated that they had no communication with any other bases around the state nor the nation either. That they were on their own. The officers gave the soldiers choices of what they wanted to do, and among those who wanted to leave was Carter. He wanted to leave for many reasons, but he wanted to personally adventure around the area, see what was going on in the outside world as he was huddled in the base for months on end, fixing the antennas and trying anything for any outside communication which didn't work at all. He was allowed to take his equipment as him and the group of others left the base and eventually went to their separate ways. 

    **Felix had ventured around the Minnesota country for another year, yet traveling on his own as he never had true trust after the doubting that had overwhelmed him and pressured him to want to leave. However, he had no one to blame but himself for being alone as he was the one who decided to leave. To all those he met throughout his travels, he told them to head towards the Air Station as there was still some form of military presence. He done this as more of a way to try and keep the people alive and wanting them safe, but he was struggling for himself with finding supplies now and again. However, through this year he met with a group in the woods of 7 people. He watched them from afar as he saw their numbers being an issue, as he saw how 5 of the 7 he was watching had looted police gear and rifles. The other two though made him rethink of wanting to hide, it being a woman and a boy. The boy maybe being at the age of 11 years old, as he was hit in the soft spot. A child having to be raised in this hellish world was not the best. He slung his rifle and decided to step out, walking towards them and stated out his position. The 5 men turned to him on sync and alert, but the 1 who seemed to be the leader was speaking to him and asked what he wanted. He was blunt with his concern for the boy and was in the middle of a sentence before he heard a crunch of a branch behind him. He turned and was faced with a butt stock slamming him in the face, crashing to the floor in a explosion of pain following to his chest and his ears ringing. He heard yelling that sounded distant and muffled, while he felt it hard to breath. He slowly went unconscious from this shock of exploding pain, having been shot to his plate carrier that luckily saved his life but it was looted from him as well, same with his rifle. He was found unconscious by another group, finding that he was wounded and still out cold. He was brought in to a settlement that had started in a private community, a few of them being veterans and some being the sheriff and deputies of the Wilkin county. The rest of the settlers being civilians who're relying on those who can fight for them, which later Felix wanted to do and managed to join the settlement's militia.

    **His wounds, them being 3 fractured ribs on the right of his rib cage and a broken nose, healed well except now he felt it harder to breath when pushing for stamina and hard to sleep. He was surprised to find himself in a community again after leaving the protection of the airfield. He been thinking how long he'd be able to last himself and began to feel maybe it was best to stay to himself and let others deal with their own problems. Then he felt conflicted with his own thoughts of doubt, feeling stressed as that day clearly scarred him. Felix was the type he meant his words, whatever it may be. He always spoke with honesty and was always warning people that he did mean the things he'd say. He wasn't so keen on socializing still, as he only knew a few veterans he'd only wanna keep close to. He wasn't very good at being social able, as he'd mostly say things that most wouldn't consider normal. He stuck with this community for awhile, until a big horde of shamblers decided to wonder and attack the community at night. The front gates caved in, as the back gates opened and most of the settlers drove out with their vehicles. The veterans and the law enforcement officers stayed to defend hold off the horde, but Felix was at the back gate to usher everyone out. The worst sight he seen was when the group of fighters were overwhelmed by the horde and fell. He decided it was his turn to run, as he ran from the back gate and just headed towards the woods. Carrying the gear he was given from the community from all this time as he felt he just hit rock bottom again. He decided to stick to the state of Minnesota, yet he decided to go to the mountains as he felt the shamblers would have a harder time to stand the cold weather further up. 

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Okay, it's really late for me (6am), but I'm gonna tackle this one quick:

-needs work

With some revisions, this could be an app I'd feel comfortable considering accepting, but as-is, it rambles very much and seems sporadic(?) I guess is the best way to describe it.  That aside, we also have a few other prior military people who have app'd and many have shown support.  This leads me personally to say that if it were to be revised, this app would get my vote to go to pending to be used at a later date as we still want the focus to be on civilian RP, not tons of people with prior service. 

For the story: I'm more interested in the mugging that took place that left this trained military man with no gear than I am with the reason why he left the militia he joined after the initial infection (although that's fine detail to keep).  I'm also intrigued why a man with a 3.8 GPA out of high school (!!!) would opt to go into the service -- I'm sure people have done it before, but this man was clearly talented in multiple if not all areas of study to pull a 3.8.

 

Keep in mind this is just my opinion, but I think most of the admin team will at least agree that the wording/framing needs some revisions.

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I understand what you mean. Last night I had gotten rushed and lazy, which I hope not to do that mistake again. I've edited again and hoped that me making this story more descriptive of what the character went through hopes to shed some light, if there's still issues then please tell me

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If anyone could comment on what else needs worked on, don't be afraid to be blunt with me or what's wrong with the application. I'd love to hear your opinion and listen to what others think.

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Im neutral on this one.

Gears fine as well as the MOS. It's the writing that gets me. You constantly repeat your characters name EVERY sentence which is very unnecessary. And most of it is just gunporn filler. I would focus more on your characters story instead of the weaponry.

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1 hour ago, Legion said:

Im neutral on this one.

Gears fine as well as the MOS. It's the writing that gets me. You constantly repeat your characters name EVERY sentence which is very unnecessary. And most of it is just gunporn filler. I would focus more on your characters story instead of the weaponry.

I took your opinion in to consideration and attempted my best to fix what you saw, as I did also see how I used Felix's name extensively. Any other complaints you have?

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This app isn't amazing by any means,  It still has the problems listed above in my eyes at least. The story feels like it was puzzle pieced together, the name Felix is still in there 30+ times. 

I'd really recommend writing it out again and proof reading it a few times, maybe even have someone else proof read it to help make things more clear and concise, we prefer quality over quantity, it does't need to be a 5-paragraph essay to be a good base story.

 

Though from seeing you RP and seeing how you handle yourself in the server I'm willing to put in my Support for this. I would rather see this re-written and made a bit better but I'm personally willing to work with it because I've seen you RP.

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6 hours ago, Zerghunter said:

This app isn't amazing by any means,  It still has the problems listed above in my eyes at least. The story feels like it was puzzle pieced together, the name Felix is still in there 30+ times. 

I'd really recommend writing it out again and proof reading it a few times, maybe even have someone else proof read it to help make things more clear and concise, we prefer quality over quantity, it does't need to be a 5-paragraph essay to be a good base story.

 

Though from seeing you RP and seeing how you handle yourself in the server I'm willing to put in my Support for this. I would rather see this re-written and made a bit better but I'm personally willing to work with it because I've seen you RP.

I see what you mean but I prefer quantity and also quality since this character is mine, he deserves to have his story told of what he experienced, how his life went from start to end. I still want the quantity but the quality better as I get more opinions. Its why I beg for more to speak up and be specific.

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I support this app based purely on how I've seen you behave in the server, barring the constant inquiries about checking your application.

Your application is not groundbreaking, but you've got a good head on your shoulders and I'm comfortable with you having the backstory and items you requested.

Something of note is that we don't currently have an item for a .40 caliber MP5, so that's going to be dumbed down to a 9 millimeter.

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On 12/15/2018 at 12:14 AM, Xander said:

He slowly went unconscious from this shock of exploding pain, having been shot to his plate carrier that luckily saved his life but it was looted from him as well, same with his rifle.

Okay, firstly I want to say: this is a really good improvement over what I originally read.  I can see the effort put into this app, and I appreciate what you've done to mold this into what it is.  That being said, I am sharing the mindset of my fellow team.  This isn't by far perfect, or a home-run.  It's passable.  But you've read that above me anyway.

I haven't seen you RP much personally, but if they're vouching for you, then that's plenty good enough for me.  Who knows, maybe if you keep with it your next app will be a home run 😉

I quoted this section because in your items it lists an MP5 and a plate carrier, however the plate carrier seems to have been stolen (despite it being shot anyway).  I'm fine with the MP5 - with a different ammo of course, as ours is 9x19 - but I guess I'm confused on that vest bit.

Either way, with so much support, now I feel comfortable accepting this application.  Congrats!

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1 hour ago, Emptybag said:

Okay, firstly I want to say: this is a really good improvement over what I originally read.  I can see the effort put into this app, and I appreciate what you've done to mold this into what it is.  That being said, I am sharing the mindset of my fellow team.  This isn't by far perfect, or a home-run.  It's passable.  But you've read that above me anyway.

I haven't seen you RP much personally, but if they're vouching for you, then that's plenty good enough for me.  Who knows, maybe if you keep with it your next app will be a home run 😉

I quoted this section because in your items it lists an MP5 and a plate carrier, however the plate carrier seems to have been stolen (despite it being shot anyway).  I'm fine with the MP5 - with a different ammo of course, as ours is 9x19 - but I guess I'm confused on that vest bit.

Either way, with so much support, now I feel comfortable accepting this application.  Congrats!

The MP5 having to be toned to 9x19 is okay with me! The plate carrier was when he was in the second group of survivor/the militia.

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