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THIS IS CANON

My dogs name is Rufus, Image related.

If he's gone bad, how can he still be a good boy? This cannot stand. -Support So many plot holes, please fix this.

Might I suggest looking at how short stories and novels are written if you're wanting to do something regarding this rather then doing something like a journal entry and his own view of the whole situation. Legion brought up some good points regarding the details of the story, to be frank majority of readers don't care about the exact details of things within the story, they care more about how the story flows and the actual plotline. I think you could make this pretty good if you move away from the almost in-game roleplay chat formatting and the Michael Bay type of action. --Nice Lamborghini--

In an all serious note (And in the nicest way possible) your writing needs some work spring, large plot holes, bad grammar and untreated deus ex machina healed gut wounds its just bad all together. Some bullet points Jason is somehow able to pull out a fire axe which range from 28 to 36 inches long and throw it at a gunman who's at point blank range. Somehow is able to break a mans neck (Here's an extremely good article about how difficult it is to actually break someones neck) immediately after getting stabbed in the stomach, then seemingly recovering instantaneously from a rather severe wound? The color scheme Please Spring for the love of god STOP THIS. Formatting is a great alternative to differentiating things through color schemes. You fry potatoes, you grill people for information. Some things are overly specific, the reader doesn't need to know the make and model of the pistol your characters sustaining multiple blows with. You have a habit of writing extremely macho, overly detail specific, non-sensical stories. I'm not trying to bash your creativity but for things like this to be taken serious they need to be toned down from the 120% Micheal Bay Hollywood levels you write them at. I posted Doom: Repercussions of Evil because it is of the same caliber as this Udesky fan fiction. I hope to see your writing improve in the future. Thank you for reading through my criticism.

I think you were looking for the term, 'grilled' instead of 'fried', but it made me laugh and love life a little more